Zeppix - Scene 7

[Kyon]

What happened before?
Zeppix had several lessons of fighting.
Meanwhile, a month passed since he first became a daemon.

Information
In this scene, Zeppix will get an explanation of how he died.
He also learns what happened to Myroel/Vaizakk.
So, in this scene, the storyline begins.
Zeppix will be sent to his first mission.
(So, I also need this mission idea)

Script
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[ExWhyZed]

Scene VII

Zeppix is fighting three Trainers. This includes Monindio, and two similarly built daemons.
Zeppix swings a blow at all three, Monindio jumps backwards, AEnder ducks, and swipes, and Liggaruus is hit in the side, and falls over.
Zeppix: Die!
Monindio: Grah!
AEnder: Yah!
Liggaruus: Oof!
Monindio gets up, and cuts downwards, narrowly missing Zeppix' head, because Zeppix is tripped by AEnder, who grabs hold of Zeppix' legs. Liggaruus is moaning, holding his side.
Zeppix: Whah!
AEnder: Take that!
Monindio: What?!
Zeppix lands, heavily, and tries to get up, using his sword to try to fend off the blows raining down on him. AEnder is charging forward. His blows are bending Zeppix' sword. Monindio is walking forward clamly, slowly weakening the dents AEnder has made.
Zeppix: Stop! Please!
AEnder: Never!
Zeppix manages to stand up, and he takes off, and hovers in the air. He slashes at AEnder, who's parry snaps Zeppix' sword. Monindio tries to grab Zeppix' legs
AEnder: Ha!
Zeppix takes his hand-crossbow from his back, and fires a bolt at AEnder's sword, shattering it. Monindio throws a knife at Zeppix' hand, so he drops the hand-crossbow.
Monindio: Game over, Zeppix.
AEnder: Monindio, does he know?
Monindio: He will be told today. He has learn enough.
AEnder: Do you want me to... ?
Monindio: Take him to Pyrance.
AEnder: Come with me, Zeppix.
There are many shots of Zeppix and AEnder walking through corridors, before entering a grand conference room.
AEnder: Behold High Governer Pyrance!
A gold daemon greets Zeppix by standing up from his elaborate throne.
Pyrance: You are here today to learn the circumstances of your death. As is the custom, you must avenge your killer. That is why you have undergone ten years training in two months.
Zeppix: Why have you kept these things a secret from me for so long?
Pyrance: You would have sought vengeance too early, and got yourself killed.
Zeppix: Oh.
Pyrance: Have you heard of Vaizakk and Myroel?
Zeppix: Occasionally.
Pyrance: They were the rulers of the daemons. They duelled, because they disagreed. Vaizakk had a trauma when he was young: His best friend was killed by CADD. That is, the Citizens Army for Destruction of Daemonkind.
Zeppix: I was taught none could see us?
Pyrance: A few can. A fraction of those want to kill us all. Vaizakk, because of the trauma, wants to destroy humankind.
Zeppix: But he can't do that alone, surely?
Pyrance: He is seeking the Artifact. This will give him eternal life, and we will be forced to follow him into battle or die.
Zeppix: Damn... Where is this Artifact?
Pyrance: Hell. But that is not our most immediate concern. I am but a politician, we need a stratagist.
Zeppix: Who?
Pyrance: Myroel. You must break into CADD headquarters and free him. Follow the patrol helicopter that's near London. Good luck.

[Kyon]

Yeeey :D
You are helping me again :D

Anyway,
the beginning was awesome.
Great fight! :D

Though, he ending was a bit weak.
It should be better.
First of all:
- Zeppix has no clue what he is, where he is, what the heck happened
- Zeppix is depressed and sad, wants answers
- I don't like the reason why Vaizakk wants to rule the world
- Don't talk about the artifact yet

Other then that, awesome! thanks alot!
Maybe after the fight, it will be something like this:

Monindio: You have improved Zeppix, I guess you are ready now...
Zeppix: Ready for what?
Monindio: To help us.
Zeppix: Help you? Monindio, it has been a month! I want to know what the heck is going on!
Monindio: We already told you, you've died.
Zeppix: Yes, but what does that mean? Is this heaven?
Monindio: Haha, no, you are still on earth Zeppix.
Zeppix: W-what?
Monindio: Enough about that, we need your help Zeppix. After this, everything will be explained.
Zeppix sighs.
Monindio: Do you know how you died, Zeppix?
Zeppix: No.
Monindio: Our leaders, Vaizakk and Myroel, there was a fight. Vaizakk, he wanted to have answers, just like you.
Zeppix: Answers on what?
Monindio: The answer on the big question: 'Why are we here?'.
Its quiet or a while...
Monindio: He said he would do anything to get it. So he started to threaten the creator.
Zeppix: What? The Creator?
Monindio: You know him as God.
Zeppix: God? He threatened god? Why?
Monindio: Because God is 'the creator'. He created us, and probably for a reason.
Zeppix: What did Vaizakk do to threaten him?
Monindio: He started to kill the innoncent...
End of scene, a flashback or flash-forward will come now.

[ExWhyZed]

I don't like in your one, how Monindio has such a different personality.
How about this:

AEnder: It is time to tell him, methinks.
Monindio: Yes. You may have the honour, AEnder.
AEnder: Zeppix, you might have wondered about a lot of things.
Zeppix: Too right I have!
AEnder: There is a reason for you having undertaken three years of training in two months.
Zeppix: What?! Aren't you going to tell me other, more important things?
Monindio: Have patience.
Monindo clouts Zeppix with the flat of his sword.
AEnder: You are interested in the circumstances of your death?
Zeppix: And why the hell I'm even here? What am I?!
Monindio: You know what you are.
AEnder: But the circumstances of your death are very important. Our leaders, Myroel and Vaizakk, fought.
Zeppix: Why?
AEnder: Vaizakk is corrupt. He will do anything for answers.
Zeppix: Answers? To what questions?
AEnder and Monindio: Why are we here?
Monindio: You know of the Creator?
Zeppix: What? God? But he isn't...
AEnder: He does exist. He Created us.
Monindio: For a reason.
AEnder: But what is this reason?
Zeppix: So, he's trying to find this out?
AEnder: Yes. But his methods are crude. He has killed many, and has caused Myroel to flee.
Monindio: We need a stratagist. There are none better than Myroel.
AEnder: But he is in a CADD base.
Monindio: That's a human society intent on destroying us.
AEnder: Follow their helicopter, and resuce him.
Monindio: Keep your wits about you.
Zeppix: ...

[Kyon]

Haha.
Talking through eachother :)
Well, nice texts, though, I am not quite planning alot of different characters.
Because we don't have many voices.

Lets scout through this scene...

- Zeppix is in the training room with Monindio
- Monindio fights Zeppix (only him)
- Zeppix has improved alot, but won't win.
- Monindio talks about Zeppix being 'ready'.

You don't want Monindio to tell him everything right?
What about Sylnyte?

- Monindio says you should talk to Sylnyte.
- Zeppix walks to Sylnyte and she speaks:

Sylnyte: So you've finally finished your basic training hm?
Zeppix: Monindio told me I am ready, ready for what?
Sylnyte: Ready to help us Zeppix, did you think you are here to relax? There is important work to do.
Zeppix: I don't even know why I am here, how I came here.
Sylnyte: You died Zeppix.
Zeppix: I know! But that doesn't explain where I am! I this heaven?
Sylnyte: Haha, you are still on earth, Zeppix.
Zeppix: W-what?

Maybe end scene here,otherwise it is gona be very long.
And seriously, I NEED A FEMALE VOICE RIGHT NOW =P
I can't continue Zeppix.
I also need Monindio's voice.

[ExWhyZed]

I thought that AEnder and Monindio could be played by the same person, just with slightly different voices. And besides, Ligaruus has nothing to say apart from Oof!

And Sylnyte isn't official.

[Kyon]

Sylnyte isn't official?
Oh and, I didn't only mean the voices.
It was more like, a month training, and Zeppix goes against THREE trainers already?

Anywaaay,
what do you think of my idea?
How can we improve it?

[ExWhyZed]

He goes against THREE trainers, because he is being trained very quickly. BEcuase of Vaizakk, they are training everyone to Elite level.

[Kyon]

He goes against THREE trainers, because he is being trained very quickly. BEcuase of Vaizakk, they are training everyone to Elite level.

I am sorry, but I don't quite like that part.
But lets focus on the text.

[ExWhyZed]

What's wrong with mine? We could just have another official made up to tell Zeppix everything, along with Monindio.
Or maybe Sylnyte is actully Myroel's secetary, and tells Zeppix what I wrote.

[Kyon]

"an official"? What?

And, I am not planning that much characters.
It would be cooler is Monindio (wich will be some sort of 'leader' of Zeppix) or
Sylnyte (wich will be his companion) say it.

So he gets explanation from someone he knows,
someone familier.

[ExWhyZed]

Maybe Sylnyte is actually Myroel's secetary or daughter, then she would be perfect to be the person that explains.

[Kyon]

Maybe Sylnyte is actually Myroel's secetary or daughter, then she would be perfect to be the person that explains.

Daughter sounds nice.
Sylnyte will be Myroels daughter.
Still, we need a mission idea.
And I am not planning on letting Myroel being captured.

[Kyon]

What happens on the end of this scene:

- Zeppix hears he is still on earth.

What happens in the next scene:

- Zeppix flies towards his father.

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