Zeppix - Scene 6

[Kyon]

What happened before?
Zeppix walked to his room.
In other words, he went to sleep, and
a new day starts.

Information
In this scene, Zeppix will learn how to fight.
Zeppix will ofcourse ask questions, and gets mad of confusion alot.
In this scene, there will be explained that he died.
(big shock for Zeppix)

Script
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[ExWhyZed]

Scene VI
Zeppix wakes up in a small bed in a small room.

Zeppix: Damn. It wasn't a dream.
Knock at door. Zeppix opens it. It is Sylnyte, carrying weapons.
Zeppix: Oh, hallo Sylnyte.
Sylnyte: Hallo Zeppix. I brought your weapons, you need to get kitted out for training.
Zeppix: It's private here. Will you answer my questions? Monindio, I think, won't.
Sylnyte: I will answer your questions as well as I can.
The following is going on whilst Sylnyte is dressing Zeppix.
Zeppix: What am I?
Sylnyte: You are a daemon.
Zeppix: God, I thought it would be like this...
Sylnyte: Raise your arm please...
Zeppix: Sure. How... How did I become like this.
Sylnyte: I'm not sure I want to tell you...
Zeppix: Come on, Sylnyte. You can tell me.
Sylnyte: You're dressed now. I'll tell you later. Whatever you do, don't ask Monindio.
Zeppix: Tell me now! Sylnyte, I'm warning you...
Sylnyte is walking away.
Zeppix: Why do they always do that?
Zeppix exits his room, and walks to the training suite.
Monindio: Welcome, Zeppix. You shall learn how to fight.
Zeppix: With this ancient stuff?
Monindio: With these mediaeval weapons, yes. And without weapons.
Zeppix: You guys aren't exactly up to date, are you?
Monindio: Our weapons work.
Zeppix: Ok. What is this place?
Monindio: You will not ask questions.
Zeppix: Why not? WHY NOT?!
Monindio: Because you are training. Parry this blow.
Monindio swings a sword at Zeppix. Zeppix ducks, and doesn't get hit.
Monindio: Parry it. Get out your sword, and parry it.
Monindio swings again, and Zeppix parries.
Monindio: Good. Now attack, I will parry. I will attack, you will parry. We will repeat this.
They do so for a while. The attacks get different eventually.
Monindio: That shall do for today. Return tomorrow.
Zeppix: Is that it?
Monindio is gone. Sylnyte has appeared.
Zeppix: So rude...
Sylnyte: You want to know how you became a daemon?
Zeppix: Yes! Let me know already!
Sylnyte: Zeppix... You died.
Zeppix: =O

[TP09]

HAHAHAHAAAA!!
That ending made me laugh!!!
Hilarious... best... written... joke... EVAARR!!

[Kyon]

Ok I don't like his reactions.
Zephyr, when Zeppix wakes up, and he sees Sylnythe, will he just say: "Hello Sylnythe"?
Hahaha, like nothing happened, like it is all casual.

Also, why did Sylnythe dress him up?
Anyway, I do like some things of this.
But they will fight melee.
And I make this scene, it is with less talk.
It will be something like: "Show me what you got..." "What?" <Monindio charges at him>
A fight starts, with Zeppix being hit all the time.

After the fight, Monindio says: "That's enough for now..."
Then Zeppix interrupts him (all beaten up): "No! Tell me what this is, where the heck am I!?"
Monindio: "Haven't you realised already? - You died Zeppix..."


Please redo, with actual realistic reactions.

[ExWhyZed]

Ok. Maybe your pride and joy "TP" will sort that for you. Pah.
I Might try later, OK? Tomorrow, or day after.

[Kyon]

Fucking hell!
Stop fighting you two.
I like BOTH your ideas.
I like your original ideas, and TP's edits.
What the fuck?

[TP09]

Redone Zephyr's attempt

Zeppix wakes up in a small bed in a small room.
Zeppix: Damn. It wasn't a dream.
Knock at door. Zeppix opens it. It is Sylnyte, carrying weapons.
Zeppix: Sylnyte!
Sylnyte: Goodmorning Zeppix. I brought your weapons, you need to get kitted out for training.
Zeppix: It's private here. Will you answer my questions? Monindio, I think, won't.
Sylnyte: I will answer your questions as well as I can.
The following is going on whilst Sylnyte is dressing Zeppix.
Zeppix: What am I?
Sylnyte: You are a daemon.
Zeppix: God, I thought it would be like this...
Sylnyte: Raise your arm please...
Zeppix: Sure. How... How did I become like this?
Sylnyte: I'm not sure I want to tell you...
Zeppix: Come on, Sylnyte. You can tell me.
Sylnyte: You're dressed now. I'll tell you later. Whatever you do, don't ask Monindio.
Zeppix: Tell me now! Sylnyte, I'm warning you...
Sylnyte is walking away.
Zeppix: Why do they always do that?
Zeppix exits his room, and walks to the training suite.
Monindio: Welcome, Zeppix. You shall learn how to fight.
Zeppix: With this ancient stuff?
Monindio: With these mediaeval weapons, yes. And without weapons.
Zeppix: You guys aren't exactly up to date, are you?
Monindio: Our weapons work, that is what matters.
Zeppix: Ok. What is this place?
Monindio: You will not ask questions.
Zeppix: Why not? WHY NOT?!
Monindio: Because you are training. Parry this blow.
Monindio swings a sword at Zeppix. Zeppix ducks, and doesn't get hit.
Monindio: Parry it. Get out your sword, and parry it.
Monindio swings again, and Zeppix parries.
Monindio: Good. Now attack, I will parry. I will attack, you will parry. We will repeat this.
They do so for a while. The attacks get different eventually.
Monindio: That shall do for today. Return tomorrow.
Zeppix: Is that it?
Monindio is gone. Sylnyte has appeared.
Zeppix: So rude...
Sylnyte: You want to know how you became a daemon?
Zeppix: Yes! Let me know already!
Sylnyte: Zeppix... You died.
Zeppix: =O

I didn't modify much this time, that means you did a great job, Zephyr :)

[Kyon]

In the beginning, he says: "God, I thought it would be like this".
Did he mean, he thought being a daemon was like this?
Because humans don't know daemons.

First reaction that was bothering me is solved now.

Later he says: "I am warning you!"
Why does he say this? :)

Then he says: "Why do they always do that?"
He talks like he has been there very long already.
Lets remove that part :)

Other then that, both, very nice job.
I will change the fighting part with melee fighting though.

[ExWhyZed]

"God, I thought it would be like this."

He thought he was a daemon, because he didn't know that before. He knew he had wings, now he knows he's one of them.

"I'm warning you!"

This is because she is walking away. He is warning her (he doesn't know about what) to come back, or face his being upset.

"Why do they always do that?"

This is because both the daemons he's had so far walk away from him rudely.

[Kyon]

Ok, last two makes sence.
I guess I still remove: "God, I thought it would be like this."
It doesn't really make sence to me.

Thanks! :)

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